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Old man at Lake Nacogdoches | Still learning to cope with his lycanthropy, Scott Gardener encounters an otherworldly figure. Originally intended as a seed for future story concepts, this scene simply did not flow with the rest of the novel. | |
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Comedic exile to wilderness | Originally written as a comic relief, Scott's and Elodea's escape from near-capture by the hands of Blue Sentinel was later revised. I felt the use of humorous elements untimely during what should be a serious transitional moment. Here is the original scene. | |
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Editing problem involving cars | At one point, I had made so many revisions that a plot discrepancy came up, in which I forgot to rewrite a scene, taking into account the fact that the characters were now living in the wilderness. Here Elodea is, fumbling through her purse and going to her car, when she doesn't have a purse or car! | |
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Expanded speech | Spoiler alert: occurs at the end! Originally, Scott Gardener's grandeose speech ran somewhat longer. I decided to cut it short for the sake of flow; I felt it had more impact that way. The first part of what he said was stronger, and the dialogue was growing weaker the more he continued. Here is the original full-length speech. | |
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Expanded Ending | Spoiler alert: occurs at the end! The ending itself was also cropped. I originally began entertaining a followup to the story's current climax, but I decided that the story needed to stop where it did, and that this anticlimax was better developed later as a seperate story. Here is the original ending, with a few hints of a followup story concept involving Gardener and Taylor pursuing a redefinition of human rights. | |
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Outtakes | This is a collection of outtakes during the "filming" of the novel. This collection of bloopers shows what happens when your characters run out of coffee. Inspired by Pixar Studios. |
Alien werewolf visits Las Vegas | This scene was removed when I decided to move Catherine's abduction to the beginning of the novel, making it a more interesting introduction. (It originally opened with the classroom presentation, followed by Catherine's arguement with Steven Penn.) It is an example of how good scenes can get lost in the editing process because the story ultimately has no place for it. | |
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Steven Penn visits Catherine | Originally I had Steven Penn visiting Catherine at her apartment after her abduction, rather than Philip. I later decided it made no sense for Philip to be absent and Steven present, when the latter was an emerging companion and Penn an obnoxious ex at the time. Here is the scene before I changed it. | |
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Catherine's Jealousy | This scene, taking place during a flashback, took place before the story opened. But, I had forgotten that Catherine had not yet acquired her white tiger therianthropy when I wrote it. It was a reasonably well-done scene, too. But, for the sake of continuity, it ended up having to be rewritten. | |
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Proselytizing Crap | During the editing process, I decided I needed to pull back and wait for the right moment to bring up religious issues. This scene was too poorly timed and lacked finesse, and focused too much on bashing rather than constructive criticism of Christianity in general, so rather than rewrite portions of the dialogue, it was cut down to a simpler scene. Here is the original form, in which Barry loses his religion. | |
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It's Like Nanowrimo | As they near the climax of the novel, Selena Hawthorne tries to remember a premonition that explains how to solve the problem of the invasion. She's under tight time constraints, with only hours to remember before she and the others are thrown into danger. As an inside joke, she compares her task to that of writing a 50,000 word novel in 30 days. As fun as the reference to National Novel Writing Month was, it ended up getting removed when I undertook National Novel Editing Month. |